Paroxysm Effect

Hahaha, fo sho! Or should i say...Po-Sho?!? :P

Ok, thoughts: [like stanza one a lot! would just line break and get rid of the and] the pages were crisp, once pressed just so creased into binding meant to ...

hmm...I must commend you on this extraordinary work of poetry ;-) But seriously, it is quite good. I can't write limericks at all, so I'm jealous. I have unfortunately never ...

I know it's bad form to comment on my own poetry, but this poem needs help...HELP! _______________________________________________________________________ “To run over better waters the little vesse

Wow...I'm not quite sure where to begin. My biggest issue with this poem is that it feels so much like it lacks a real point . I just feel like ...

Dude, you guys, come on! Dragons just plain trump monkeys any day!!! Vote D-R-A-G-O-N-S!!!

I like the initial idea behind this all, but there are parts that could use some tweaking. The image of the music box is strong, and I would like to ...

In this town, there is only one road. If you drive over the thirty-five mile an hour speed limit, you would surely miss all of the landmarks of this little ...

I would really like to see this expanded--just when you get the tiniest glimpse of what is really at the core of the poem, it ends, and the reader is ...

I think that my biggest problem with this poem is that it doesn't drive home a real point/message/statement about your subject. It is an interesting observation, I suppose...but my question ...

I am perched in a brackish chemical solution. I hope it can clean my shoes. They are so speckled with grime. The light looks so beautiful from inside my test ...

These are really great! Lust and Vanity are my favorites...they really look the part. I agree that these would look even better if you were to go over them in ...

This is really fun. I enjoy the scenery and the dragon. My only criticism would be the hand that's on the dragon's back. It seems a little bit out-of-place, but ...

“Put me in your holy war I will lay my body down… I will run into the flame” -Johnathan Rice I will feel the heat lick my flesh in an ...

You really do not need all of those line breaks. There are a few spots where they seem especially arbitrary: "She grasps my finger, like she will never let go." ...